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Enjoyed it ... although one word jarred me out of your world: "tape", as in "She popped in a tape".

If you'd said "chip" or "card" or "drive" or "memstick" or something, it wouldn't have jarred.

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That's a very good point! I chose "tape" deliberately—I'm going for a kind of retro-future thing throughout. That's why Greg has a hot plate, why there's a very exciting scene that involves him doing math with a pencil later on…Please keep me posted about whether or not these little details also jar or if they start to cohere into a whole! And thank you, of course, for reading. I really appreciate it.

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